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A pair of eyes;
Open and stare through the lights,
Into the darkness of doom.
And yet they smile,
Yet they smile.

A drop of tear;
Seeps through the garden of death;
Falls to the mortal soil.
Dreams and desires will blend again,
To render the roses alive.

I am floating through a vision.
Like ripples, floating through the pond of life.
Can reality be so real?

Let me drown again,
Into the silence of familiar noise.
As I wander through the lanes of reason and passion.
The flame of hope burns bright,
Drenched in the colors of freedom.
So let my dreams unravel my soul,
As darkness fades away;
And let mortality draw me closer to destiny.
As these pair of eyes,
Open to stare through the lights again.

Is this reality?
Can reality be so real?

Time passes by, as the eyes keep staring;
Staring at the distant lights;
Staring beyond the distant skies.
What do they see?
What do they long?
What do they desire?

Then the skies will break down;
White lightning striking the dreamy clouds.

Moments will turn into memories,
Passion into pain.
Questions that once seemed to matter,
Will be washed out in the rain.
The hands which once held me tight,
Wearing different faces of love.
The moments that felt so alive.
The reflections which rendered me life.
All the shadows that once felt so obvious.
All the noises; so ordinary; so true.
Treasured dreams colored in innocence.
Some stories left incomplete.
Some choices we could not undo.

The lightning strikes;
The canvas burns.
Reality changes dimension.
Then comes the rain, washing all away.

I am floating again,
Is this a vision?
Am I sleeping?
Was I ever awake?

Silence; where once voices reigned.
Infinity; where once logic questioned fate.

Far away in the distance, the lights still keep burning bright.
Reminding me of the skies that once bred colors.

Shall I reach out once again?
Shall I walk the road one more time?

What should I learn, to unlearn that I shouldn’t have learnt?
What should I do, to do the undone?

All of it, does it even matter?
Should it even matter?

Standing on this edge,
Let me question once again.
What is reality?
Can reality even feel so real?
Well...for those who hate reading long poems, I'm extremely sorry for the length of this piece. Its just that I had a lot of questions when I started writing this down.

As I look back on my life, all my memories, my moments seem so distant. Its like I've been floating through existence looking at my life unfold. It makes me question if any of it was actually real. Can reality even feel so real?

The poem is basically about this feeling and a lot more.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-12-10
Dreams of reality by ~cruisnick An interesting and fresh take on a slightly used concept. ( Suggested by Same-side and Featured by inknalcohol )
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amrgalal7 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a masterpiece my friend :heart:
So deep with a chill of fear and melancholy!
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Medoriko Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Student Writer
Beautiful. Congrats on the DD for this. Even though I'm a year late :lol: I actually LIKE that this poem is long. I think you had so much to say, and it was so profound. It's different than other pieces I have read. Well done.
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Edited Jul 27, 2014
Ah, yes this was certainly a very long piece. It took me number of days to write it and as you said, I had a lot of questions on my mind (well, I still do and I guess will always have them).
I'm glad you took the pain of reading through it all and thanks a lot for the fav. It really means a lot to me.:)
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Medoriko Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Student Writer
No problem :)
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014
:love:
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tinkabella83 Featured By Owner Dec 25, 2013
♡♥♡
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014
Thanks.....
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Okitakehyate Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
It sounds a lot like my own reality.. I have often wondered if reality is truly even real or if it's just a figment of our own imagination something that we create to make ourselves feel safe, and stable and secure when life is really but a dream... or to quote Shakespeare "a tale told by an idiot, full of sound and fury and signifying nothing" Sometimes I wonder what it would be like if one day I woke up and found that I'd been laying in a hospital in a coma since I was a kid and everything I thought had ever happened was all a dream and no one I'd ever met and nothing I'd ever owned or done had ever existed. I don't really know how such a thing as reality can truly exist in this world... it seems everybody sees something different. My fiance and I see a world of dreams and imagination into which we can flee from reality like cockroaches from the light, my mom sees reality almost as if it were a god that will guide and bless you if you respect and fear it's teachings but punish you if you ignore it... to some it is cold and dark to others it is warm and bright, to others they still feel like they are waiting for it to begin. No one really sees the same reality, we don't even see ourselves as others see us, and it's something so easily altered, a drink, a drug, or a dream crushing remark can completely shift it and turn it on it's head! I don't really believe that anything I see, hear, feel or think can even truly be real.. because if I honestly told anyone other then my fiance my version if reality and life as I saw it they would think I was on drugs or crazy or simply making things up. My life is a bad fan-fiction and I'm the Mary Sue...
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2014
Please forgive me for replying so late. Got a bit entangled in the events of life.
Well, first of all, I would like to thank you for not only taking your time to read the poem, but also sharing your thoughts. What you wrote above is in itself a piece of art. The sheer beauty and depth of your comment made me feel so glad that I wrote this piece. Thank you so much for being so expressive and inspiring. Thank you....
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Okitakehyate Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2014
That's okay, it happens to us all. Thank you so much for seeing and admiring the beauty of my comment. :)
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Wolfmoon35 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I was just browsing through the Daily Deviations, this caught my eye, and I couldn't help but continue reading. As other people have mentioned, I can relate to this. It's haunting in a sense, filled with longing and is somehow bittersweet. Strangely, it's more on the sweet side. Excellent penmanship! I hope that more people pause and read this.
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
Hey Christine. Wow! I simply loved your comment. Thank you so much for being so expressive. Reading such a long piece and then providing a constructive comment really needs a lot of patience. This world need people like you to inspire us to write better and be more expressive. Thank you for your support and I am really glad you liked the piece...:)
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Wolfmoon35 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hi Nilanjan! Aww... Thank you too for replying right away and for the sweet words. Honestly, I'm not always full of patience. It's a work in progress. But we all have flaws that need to be paid attention to and fixed if possible. Anyways, I hope that I'll be able to write such poignant poems like you do. I am a novice poet and I've been thinking of posting some poems here on deviantart. However, I'm rather paranoid about people plagiarizing so I'm quite reluctant to share something of my own online where it stays forever and can be used for purposes different from the ones intended. (Yikes, run-on sentence lol.) Although, reading your poem makes me want to post a poem of my own nonetheless. Perhaps I'm beginning to have the courage to do so. :)
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hudgens77 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist
Wow I really loved it! You know, I've asked myself the same question sometimes. It's like, time passes so quickly and suddenly you look back and so many things happened, there are so many memories and they don't feel real. Anyway, this was a really great poem and I really liked the way you expressed yourself :)
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013
Hey Adriana. I am so glad you liked this piece and more importantly I am glad that you could relate to it so easily. Life and reality in itself has always made me inquisitive.To see that there are people out there who feel the same as I do makes me feel more close to this dimension of reality. Thank you so much for stopping by and sharing your thoughts...:)
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hudgens77 Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2013  Hobbyist
you're always welcome:heart: you captured the feelings really well!:D
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Stargyver Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I love it. Its good to see that some other people are writing and thinking a little deeper and a little more outside the box.
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
Hey Sarralyn....I am so glad you could relate to my poem and for taking time to read it......Thank you so much....:)
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Stargyver Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No prob. I write poems too, so I know what its like to come out and show the world what you're hiding or thinking. :)
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
Hey Christina...Thank you so much.....I never thought I was good enough to get a DD....but you guys are too great....I am so damn HAPPY....:happybounce: 
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure, glad to know you enjoyed it :happybounce:
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OceanHunter Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013

you almost captured the essence of reality, but alas no matter how hard your try until the day you die, will you ever understand the whole perspective. thus is the curse we mere mortals suffer

 

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cruisnick Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
Very well said Bailes. How sad it is and yet so delightful that we wont ever understand existence and unveil its true face. May be that's what life is all about, believing in the present and relishing it before it expires. I am so glad I am here being able to feel life and reality the way it is....:)
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cosplayfan001 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
Wow, so in depth. I'm speechless :) very beautifully written! ^^ Clap 
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
Oh I am so glad you liked it, Heather. Thank you so much.
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cosplayfan001 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
You're welcome :D
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popkool Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
This poem.....Its BEAUTIFUL!
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013
Hey Pace....I am so glad you liked it.....Thank you for reading the entire thing...:)
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popkool Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
No problem, It was amazing
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