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What good is a day?
When all its hardship and all its light;
Has to fade away,
And end in a night.

A world painted in colors of unceasing lives;
Of incessant pace, of relentless sights.

And the ever-changing shades of a familiar world,
All cease to dwell.
As the angels light the butterflies aflame,
And the heavens paint the gloom of the Gods.

I, Queen of the Other Worlds,
Question thee, Oh Wanderer of Life.
Why fight the battles of a mythical dream?
Why seek repose beyond these refulgent skies?
Cause beyond these lights only darkness shall prevail.

Oh Wanderer of Life,
What good is a day,
When all of it has to end in a night?

Oh mighty Queen of the Other Worlds,
I flow through these days like a crinkling stream.
Bathed in the hues of a mortal sky.
Battling the path, dissolving its pain;
An ever changing form seeking absolution.

Then comes the dark,
Lingering through the tinted skies,
As light evades the somnolence of a languid day.

Deprived of sleep I stay awake.
Deprived of dreams my soul await,
To savor the creations of the fading lights;
To savor the genesis of an infant night.

Staring at me is an age old universe.
Staring at me are a thousand eyes.
Twinkling, a teasing beauty;
A thousand diamonds floating in the sky.

And so float around like little specks of flame;
Fireflies blinking in the dark.
And so breathes the breeze with an untamed silence,
Carrying fragrances of a long lost earth soaked in rain.

I, a mere Wanderer of Life;
Implore thee, Oh Queen of the Queens.
Come bathe in the millennial shades of the night.
And question the weary pilgrim in thou soul.
“What good will the battles of a day be,
If our lives couldn’t conclude into a tranquil night?”
For :iconthewritersmeow: "What good is a day" prompt for poetry.

Update: This piece got me my first contest win at :iconthewritersmeow: Thanks to Medoriko, the entire team of TheWritersMeow and all the people took the pain of reading it and giving it a vote. Thanks a lot for this huge honor everyone.
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Student Writer
Very interesting concept! :love: 
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014
I'm so glad you like it. :happybounce: I was a bit nervous about the concept and whether I was using it properly.
Thanks a lot for the comment. Love 
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saevuswinds Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Student Writer
No problem!
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014
:squee: 
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Eilwenn Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014
I do not know why, but when I red "I, Queen of the Other World", I just imagined the voice of Daenerys Targaryen from Game of Thrones... =O
I love the way you dicuss to points of view, you're a wonderful writer ! =)
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Edited Jul 27, 2014
Oh damn, if only the character of Daenerys Targaryen would have come to my mind I might have been able to add a bit more polish to it. What a powerful character she was.
Thanks a lot for the beautiful comment Gaëlle. Your words have always motivated me to keep writing more. Thanks for your constant support. Hug 
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Eilwenn Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014
Haha, I'm pretty sure you'd be x)
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014
Hug 
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Star-Flavored Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
I really enjoyed this! It has a very nice rhythmic flow to it. I also like how pleasantly whimsical it is and the approach you took in having the two debating viewpoints of the same subject matter. Your imagery is very nice as well.
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Edited Jul 26, 2014
Oh, thanks a lot for your wonderful comment. Well, the entire credit goes to Medoriko and TheWritersMeow for the wonderful prompt. It really got me thinking a lot and I was really not sure if I was doing justice to the topic. However your in-depth reply has really got me a bit of satisfaction.
I'm really glad you spared some time and read through the piece.  Thanks a lot. :)
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Star-Flavored Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Student Artisan Crafter
You are very welcome! Keep up the good work! :>
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014
Thanks a lot. You are awesome.Hug 
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Medoriko Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Student Writer
:heart: Thank you for the mention. This is a lovely piece, let me say. I need to go through your gallery, I really enjoy what I've been seeing. 
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014
I'm so very truly deeply glad that you like it.:happybounce:
It will be a huge honor to have you take a walk through my gallery. You have surely made my day.
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Medoriko Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Student Writer
:heart: I'm glad. And LOL that icon. 
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014
Yeah, isn't that icon something. :lmao:
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Medoriko Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014  Student Writer
:lmao: Yes. It took me by surprise. I got a good chuckle :giggle:
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Jul 27, 2014
Same thing happened with me when I stumbled over it. Giggle 
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Very nice. :clap:
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014
Hey Ricky. Thanks mate. I'm glad you took the pain of reading this exceedingly long piece and leaving a comment. You are awesome.Nod 
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:manhug: :heart: Likewise, brother. :)
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014
:)
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chromeantennae Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:D
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Mez3rika Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014  Hobbyist
This is so beautiful. I admire the first stanza the most:
"What good is a day?
When all its hardship and all its light;
Has to fade away, 
And end in a night."

So simple, and heavy in meaning. I adore your concepts and ideas, Nil! You're good. :heart:
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2014
Thanks dear. I know this is quite a long piece and I'm really glad you read through it. You are a real inspiration Mez. Thanks a lot.Hug 
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Mez3rika Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist
Awh it's fine Nil, and you're most welcome. :huggle:
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014
La la la la :squee:  Thanks a lot Mez. Huggle! 
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Mez3rika Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2014  Hobbyist
Anytime my dear. :hug:
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cruisnick Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2014
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